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LAB FORUM — WRITING PAPERS | DRAFT

Turning Figures into Text

Draft — Do not start with the Introduction. Write from Methods, close with the Abstract
Results is "what happened," Discussion is "what it means." If the Introduction is a "declaration of what is lacking," the Discussion is a "declaration of what is updated." If they are not mirrors, the structure is broken.

What this lecture covers

The Lab Forum lecture "Writing Papers" covered the whole picture of submission, and "Writing Papers — Figures" covered the design of figures. This page covers the stretch from the figures being frozen to the manuscript being complete — Draft-A to Draft-I of the Paper Card.

There are two prerequisites. The figures have been frozen in Figures-C. The Core Question and Key Contributions have been fixed in Framing-A and B. With these two, the Draft is not a task of writing from a blank page, but a task of unfolding decided materials into text.

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Act 1 The order of writing
Why write from Methods
2
Act 2 Methods and Results
The foundation of facts
3
Act 3 Discussion
Five paragraphs that give meaning
4
Act 4 Introduction
Work backward as the mirror of the Discussion
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Act 5 Conclusion and Abstract
Compression
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Act 6 Completion and polish
Withstanding review

B4: Learn what each chapter of your thesis is responsible for. M & D: Check whether the Introduction and Discussion of your own manuscript are mirrors. Postdocs: Apply the five-paragraph structure of the Discussion to a junior's manuscript.

Act 1
Do not start with the Introduction
The order of writing — The order of reading and the order of writing differ

The order of writing

Methods → Results → Discussion → Introduction → Conclusion → Abstract → Polish

In a manuscript, the order of reading and the order of writing differ. The reader reads Abstract → Introduction → …, but the writer writes from the other end.

The reason is simple: the Introduction cannot be written without knowing "what this paper has shown." At the end of the Introduction comes "Here we show that…". That must match the first sentence of the Discussion. If you write the Introduction before the Discussion, you either announce something you did not show, or fail to announce what you did show.

We write from Methods because it is closest to "facts" and the place where you get lost the least. When you cannot write, write from where you can. "Against the fear of the blank page, start from the caption of Figure 1," stated in Writing Papers, is the same principle.

When you cannot write, write from where you can (Methods).

The most important principle: the mirror structure

The Introduction and the Discussion are mirrors

The Introduction and the Discussion are mirrors. The Introduction declares "the field knows this much, and this is what is lacking (the Gap)," and the Discussion declares "with this result the Gap is filled in this way, and the field's assumption is updated in this way." If what the Introduction declared to be lacking is not recovered in the Discussion, the structure of the paper is broken.

The division of roles between Results and Discussion is just as important. Results is only "what happened." Discussion is only "what it means." When the two mix, the reader can no longer distinguish fact from interpretation, and the reviewer writes "Overclaiming."

Always check that the Introduction's declaration of what is lacking is recovered in the Discussion.
Act 2
The foundation of facts
Methods and Results

Draft-A|Methods: In a form others can reproduce

The purpose of Methods is to write the foundation of facts that others can reproduce. It is where the "reproducibility" of Lab OS Chapter 06 is implemented as text.

Four blocks

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Study Design
What was investigated, under what conditions, compared with what, under what constraints. "We designed a study to examine …"
2
Data / Materials
Source of the data, sample size, period, selection criteria. "Data were obtained from … The dataset includes …"
3
Model / Procedure
The procedure as Step 1, 2, 3. "We applied … The workflow consists of:"
4
Evaluation
Evaluation metrics and the treatment of uncertainty. "Performance was evaluated using … We quantified uncertainty by …"

"Details omitted" is an abandonment of reproducibility. Conversely, reusing the Methods of your master's thesis in a journal paper is accepted if you cite the source (see the self-plagiarism table in Writing Papers). Methods is the only place in a paper where "writing to a template" is allowed.

Methods is the only place where "writing to a template" is allowed.

Draft-B|Results: Do not interpret

The purpose of Results is to write only the facts that correspond to the figures.

Template: "Figure 1 shows … X increased as … The difference between A and B was …" Include numbers, confidence intervals, and the direction of the comparison.

If you feel like writing "why it happens" in Results, move it to the Direct Answer or Assumption Refinement of the Discussion. Once even a single interpretation slips into Results, the reader reads all subsequent facts as interpretation-laden.

Results is facts only. Move "why" to the Discussion.
Act 3
Five paragraphs that give meaning
Discussion

Discussion: Five paragraphs

The purpose of the Discussion is to answer the Core Question and give the results meaning (an update of the field's beliefs). Write five paragraphs, in this order. The order traces the outputs of Framing-A (Core Question, Gap, Hidden assumption, Why it matters) in reverse.

1|Direct Answer: Answer the question directly

Copy the Core Question and answer it directly in one or two sentences. Summarize the results concisely; numbers may be included. Do not widen the interpretation here. "This study shows that … Our results indicate that …"

The first sentence of this paragraph becomes the "Here we show" of the Introduction and the first sentence of the Conclusion. Say the same thing in three places. If they diverge, the claim of the paper is not yet settled.

2|Gap Resolution: Recover the Gap

Reread the Gap sentence of the Introduction, make explicit "what was lacking," and write how the present results fill it. Do not create a new Gap here. "Our findings address the limitation that … This resolves the uncertainty regarding …"

3|Assumption Refinement: Update the assumption

Write one assumption of existing research and how it changes. Write it as an "update," not a "denial." An aggressive style gains nothing, considering that a reviewer may hold that assumption. "This challenges the assumption that … Instead, our results suggest that …"

The Hidden assumption and Our update in the Comparison Table of Framing-A are the direct material for this paragraph.

4|Field Implication: Meaning for the field

Reread the opening of the Introduction (Broad Context) and write how that context changes. Make explicit where it affects theory, application, or design. Do not save the world. "These findings change how we understand … This has implications for …"

The commitment of Lab OS Chapter 02 matters here. A paper committed to explanation has implications for understanding; a paper committed to control has implications for design. Do not write implications your evidence does not reach.

5|Limitations: Limits and the next question

Write two or three constraints of this study, how they affect the results, and indicate the next research direction. Do not be defensive. "This study assumes … One limitation is … Future work should …"

A paper that writes its limitations honestly withstands review better. If you can separate discrepancy (reducible uncertainty) from unknowability (irreducible uncertainty), the Limitations become not a confession of weakness but a bridge to the next inquiry.

A paper that writes its limitations honestly withstands review better.

Discussion Check

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Does it answer the Core Question directly?
2
Does it recover the Gap?
3
Is the Context updated?
4
Is there any figure or result that appears for the first time in the Discussion?
Act 4
Work backward as the mirror
Introduction

Draft-D|Introduction: Write after the Discussion

The purpose of the Introduction is to place the provisional belief settled in the Discussion correctly in the context of the field. The Narrative Skeleton of Lab OS Chapter 04 was a blueprint written before the data came in. Here, with the Discussion settled, you rewrite it.

Five elements

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Broad Context (1–2 sentences)
The big question of the field and why it matters. An opening that makes sense even outside the specialty. "Understanding X is important because …"
2
Field Context (2–3 sentences)
The dominant models and assumptions. What is taken as "obvious." Do not turn it into a detailed review. "Previous studies have assumed that … Most existing approaches focus on …"
3
Gap (1 sentence)
The declaration of what is lacking. Write neither the method nor the result. "However, it remains unclear whether …"
4
Core Question (1 sentence)
Does not end in Yes/No. Does not hint at the result. "This study asks: How does … ?"
5
Contribution Preview (1 sentence)
"Here, we show that …" Match it to the first sentence of the Discussion

Introduction Check

1
Is the Gap recovered in the Discussion?
2
Does the Contribution Preview match the Discussion?
3
Have you added no new claims?

New claims grow in the Introduction because, while writing, you think "I can say this too." If you can say it, go back to the Discussion and add a paragraph. Do not announce in the Introduction what is not in the Discussion.

Do not announce in the Introduction what is not in the Discussion.
Act 5
Compression
Conclusion and Abstract

Draft-E|Conclusion: Within three paragraphs

1
Restated Contribution
Summarize the first sentence of the Discussion. Numbers may be included. No new information. "This study demonstrates that …"
2
Field-Level Meaning
How this result changes the assumption. 2–3 sentences. Do not overclaim. "These findings refine the understanding of … This suggests that …"
3
Forward Look
The next question, given the limitations. Do not use abstract phrases like "the future is bright." 1–2 sentences. "Future work should …"

Check: Is it not a repetition of Results? / Is it not a copy of the Discussion? / Is it not overclaiming?

Draft-F|Abstract: 6–7 sentences, fixed order

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Background (1 sentence)
The Broad Context in one sentence. Reduce technical terms
2
Gap (1 sentence)
"However, it remains unclear whether …"
3
Question (1 sentence)
"This study investigates …"
4
Method (1 sentence)
"We developed / applied …"
5
Results (2 sentences)
"We found that … Specifically, …" Write numbers and direction
6
Implication (1 sentence)
"These findings suggest that …"

Check: Does it match the Introduction? / Does it match the Discussion? / Does it contain no new information? / Is it within 200–250 words?

The passing condition is that the claim is understood from the Abstract alone. Most readers read only the Abstract. Reviewers, too, first fix the paper's claim from the Abstract, then check whether the body supports it.

Most readers read only the Abstract. Does it convey the claim on its own?
Act 6
Withstanding review
Completion and polish

Draft-G|Structural Audit

Once all sections are in place, audit the structure.

Anticipated reviewer comments

The comments reviewers write are surprisingly similar.

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Novelty is unclear
Where the novelty lies is unclear. "Compared to X, we Y" is not visible in the Introduction
2
Comparison is insufficient
The comparison is lacking. The Prior study in the Comparison Table is not compared in the text
3
Assumptions are unrealistic
The assumptions are unrealistic. The assumptions and range of validity are not written in Methods
4
Overclaiming
The claim exceeds the evidence. The facts in Results and the implications in Discussion straddle commitments

All four can be eliminated at the Framing and Figures stages of the Paper Card. Before submission, write these four yourself and be able to point to where in the manuscript the answer to each lies.

Before submission, be able to point to the answers to these four.

Draft-H|Full text: Rough is fine

Produce a manuscript in which the claim can be read through. Do not write from the top, do not aim for perfection, do not worry too much about the fine points of English, do not overthink the reviewer response. This is the stage where "separate generation from editing," stated in Writing Papers, is carried out across the whole manuscript. Mark the points where you want comments, and hand it to Team Meeting or your supervisor.

Draft-I|Polish: Do not polish forever

Aim for the minimum completeness that withstands review. Cut what can be cut. Write the answers to the anticipated reviewer comments. Decide what to move to the Appendix.

Do not keep polishing forever. Prioritize clarity of logic over perfect English expression. For sentence-by-sentence checking, use the five items of Writing Paper Skills (strength of claim, reviewer's challenge, correspondence with evidence, validity of comparison, safer rewrite).

Prioritize clarity of logic over perfect English.

The words of claim strength

Implement the commitments of Lab OS Chapter 02 as verbs.

CommitmentVerbs you can use
Descriptionobserved, measured, found
Explanationindicates, is consistent with, is controlled by (after eliminating alternative explanations)
Predictionpredicts, generalizes to
Controlenables, improves, reduces

Use "suggests" only in the Discussion, as a weak commitment to explanation. Not in Results. "demonstrates" and "proves" only when the evidence reaches that level.

The commitment of a verb must not exceed the level of the evidence.

Final checklist

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Is the order of writing Methods → Results → Discussion → Introduction → Conclusion → Abstract?
2
Is Methods at a granularity others can reproduce?
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Is Results one-to-one with the figures, with no interpretation, no evaluative words, and no "suggests"?
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Is the Discussion five paragraphs (Direct Answer / Gap Resolution / Assumption Refinement / Field Implication / Limitations)?
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Do the first sentence of the Discussion, the "Here we show" of the Introduction, and the first sentence of the Conclusion match?
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Is the Gap of the Introduction recovered in the Discussion?
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Is the Abstract 6–7 sentences, in fixed order, within 250 words, and consistent with the body?
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Can you state the answers to the four anticipated reviewer comments, with their locations in the manuscript?
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Have you run the five items of Writing Paper Skills sentence by sentence?

Takeaways by role

B4
Find the interpretive sentences
Find the interpretive sentences in the Results of your thesis and move them to the Discussion. That alone separates the roles of the chapters
M & D
Write the three sentences side by side
Write side by side the first sentence of the Discussion, the "Here we show" of the Introduction, and the first sentence of the Conclusion. If they do not match, the paper's claim is not yet one
Postdocs
Read for the mirror structure only
Read a junior's manuscript for the "mirror structure" only. If the Gap and the Resolution do not correspond, postpone all other editing

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